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शीर्षक
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Aneta B.द्वारा बुझाइएको
स्रोत भाषा: पोलिस

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Stwórco

Przy Tobie serca wiernych
z Radości doskonałej śpiewają
franciszkańskie hymny
a zatwardziałych topnieją
wnet jak wosk dają się lepić

a mądrość mędrców oddaje Ci pokłon
i już się nie pyszni
bo nagle dziwi siÄ™ i zachwyca

i wszystko CO CHCESZ potrafisz
Niezmierzony!
Ręce Twoje WSZYSTKO
w DOBRO przemieniają…
अनुबादका लागि चाहिन सक्ने थप जानकारी
British English (archaic)

शीर्षक
I adore Thy miracles, o Creator ...
अनुबाद
अंग्रेजी

iluvmilkaद्वारा अनुबाद गरिएको
अनुबाद गर्नुपर्ने भाषा: अंग्रेजी

I adore Thy miracles,
O Creator

In Thy presence all the hearts of the faithful
sing, delirious in joy,
Franciscan hymns
And all the hardened hearts melt -
they can be moulded like wax

And the wise sages pay homage
And refrain from boasting
as they suddenly wonder and marvel

And everything Thou desirest, Thou canst have
Almighty God!
Thy hands turn EVERYTHING
into a BLESSING…
Validated by kafetzou - 2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 30日 15:51





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2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 24日 17:48

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Thank you, Ania!!!
Very smart and faithful translation. I have only few suggestions:

"I adore Thy miracles,
Creator

In Thy presence all the hearts of the faithful
are singing, delirious in joy (??? why not: "in a perfect joy" like in an original?),
Franciscan hymns
And all the hardened hearts are melting,
they can be moulded like wax

And the wisdom of the sages pays homage
And stops boasting
as it suddenly wonders and marvels

And everything THOU WANT, Thou can
Immense God!
Thy hands turn EVERYTHING
into BLESSING…"

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 27日 23:32

kafetzou
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 7963
This looks really good.

Some suggestions:
1) If you're going to use "thy" and "thou", you need to use the old forms of the verbs too: thou wantest (or desirest), thou canst have/do ...
2) As you can see in my first suggestion, the modal verb "can" needs to be followed by a verb, either "have" or "do".
3) "in perfect joy" would be OK (no article)
4) How about "Almighty God" instead of "Immense God"?
5) I think the verb tenses in the first part would be better in simple present: sing, melt
6) Is it the wisdom that wonders and marvels, or is it the sages? Suggestion:

And the wise sages pay homage
And stop boasting
As they suddenly wonder and marvel

7) You're right about "Franciscan".

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 28日 15:44

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Oh, thank you, Laura!!!!
I agree with all your suggestions...
Thank you for the old forms of the verbs! I only met them sometimes reading English literature from XIX century. But I never used the forms by myself, so wouldn't know how to put them into the poems. That is why I'm so glad you have suggested the right forms...

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 28日 16:06

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Oh, only "Almighty" (God) isn't the most appropriate adjective in my opinion... In the original I say about God who you can't measure, because He has no the beginning and the end, and He can be everywhere in the same time, nothing limits Him...
"Unlimited" God?

And is it needed to add "wise" to "sages"? Sages=wise men...?


2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 28日 17:07

kafetzou
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 7963
It's just that we don't say unlimited or immense for God. We just say almighty.

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 28日 17:14

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Really? As you say it, I should accept "Almighty" then... Thank you once again!

But could you change the whole poem into old English, please?

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 29日 04:24

kafetzou
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 7963
I adore Thy miracles,
O Creator

In Thy presence all the hearts of the faithful
sing, delirious in joy,
Franciscan hymns
And all the hardened hearts melt -
they can be moulded like wax

And the wise sages pay homage
And refrain from boasting
as they suddenly wonder and marvel

And everything Thou desirest, Thou canst have
Almighty God!
Thy hands turn EVERYTHING
into a BLESSING…

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 29日 08:58

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Thank you!
I think we can accept it now!

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 30日 08:33

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Laura, you didn't insert all the changes we had been talking about and you accepted. Why?

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 30日 15:49

kafetzou
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 7963
Because it was for you, and you had the changes you wanted. But I'll do that.

2009年 सेप्टेम्बर 30日 15:55

Aneta B.
चिठ्ठीको सङ्ख्या: 4487
Thank you, Laura, so much!