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| | 2 Februar 2008 17:03 |
| | "I'm really looking forward to take in at a the hotel and unpack the bags.' This needs to be changed. It isn't clear.
Other than that there are a few small edits that I can do for you.
Best,
David |
| | 2 Februar 2008 17:20 |
| piasAntal indlæg: 8113 | Hi David,
is it better to write:
"I really look forward to go to the hotel and pack up my bags"
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| | 2 Februar 2008 21:12 |
| | Yes,
I think that makes it. Why don't you edit it that way and we'll see what happens when we put it for a vote. |
| | 2 Februar 2008 22:37 |
| | Pia
I don't think pack up is a good choice.
That is used when you finished doing something and will collect your thing together and put them into bags or boxes.
I guess that what the writer means is: unpack...go to the hotel and unpack my bags.( rest, after the tough journey). It seems to me that the person has just arrived somewhere new and is on his/her way to the hotel from the airport perhaps... ?
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| | 2 Februar 2008 22:18 |
| piasAntal indlæg: 8113 | Hi Lilly.
Agree...unpack sounds better than pack up!
I actually used that word "unpack" in my origin translation before edits..
Shall I edit it back dramati to:
"I really look forward to go to the hotel and unpack my bags." |
| | 2 Februar 2008 23:20 |
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| | 2 Februar 2008 23:33 |
| | Just one little remark Pia:
"...är våran taxi som står här utanför "
"...is our taxi that is outside "
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| | 3 Februar 2008 07:40 |
| piasAntal indlæg: 8113 | Ok, I'll edit.
And also change "I think that it is our taxi that waits outside.." to "I think that it is our taxi which stand outside" (som står)
Thanks Lilian for notice me again!
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| | 3 Februar 2008 10:13 |
| | Pia:
I think you misunderstood me.
What I meant is that you should use the verb "to be" in that sentence:
I think it's our taxi which is outside.
If you like "stand" better, you have to put it into 3rd person: (it) stands
However, I feel that it sounds much better is in English.
But, that's a matter of choice. |
| | 3 Februar 2008 10:23 |
| piasAntal indlæg: 8113 | Ok...missunderstandings ALL the time.
I'll edit to "is" now, maybe that is a better way to write in english. |
| | 3 Februar 2008 12:31 |
| | "nit picking", you may say about my suggestions, but here is another one:
is out there or just outside
sorry for being so boring, I promise, this is the last one!!! |
| | 3 Februar 2008 10:57 |
| | "A tough but funny journey." |
| | 3 Februar 2008 13:21 |
| piasAntal indlæg: 8113 | I'll edit to your proposal Lilly and even to yours svennebus. So..now I have to give you half the points Lilly, since this translation is more yours than mine now.
Thank you both for good proposal! |
| | 3 Februar 2008 13:33 |
| | Come on, Pia!
You have helped me already.
I'm glad to be "useful".
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| | 3 Februar 2008 22:36 |
| | Now thats the spirit...all any of us wants to do is to give a good translation...I love you both! Great work. |