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| | 23 Tháng 7 2011 18:27 |
| | ekizilok,
Çevirilerinizi hatalı gönderiyor gibisiniz. Doğru şekilde yapabilmek için yukarıdaki mavi renkli Çevir düğmesini tıklamalı ve çevirinizi açılan sayfaya yazmalısınız.
Bu sayfanın altındaki boş alan ise çeviri veya orijinal metinle ilgili dikkate değer yorumların yazılması içindir.
Saygılarımızla,
CC: ekızılok |
| | 26 Tháng 7 2011 14:52 |
| LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | Hi ekızılok
Your text does not sound very natural in English so I have tried to make some edits below. Please let me know if I understood your translation correctly! (As an expert assistant, one of my jobs here is to make sure the English is correct, but I don't understand Turkish, so I need you to make sure the English text is an accurate representation of the Turkish one )
God created Love, then betrayal... A woman took them and wore could you please explain what this means? I don't understand this sentence. She gave birth to her lies. Then, God created the pain and left outside a house of a man after swathing again, I don't understand this sentence left what? after swathing = ??. The man felt the pain, saw the betrayal. He became a poem! If you fall in love with such a woman, you'll be a poem or a breathing corpse. just to make sure: a corpse is a dead body. Is this what you mean?
Please note that these comments are not meant to criticise you; on cucumis, we try to help each other to provide the best translations |
| | 26 Tháng 7 2011 17:05 |
| | Hi,
Moreover, "she gave birth her lies" > she gave birth to lies between her dirty legs |
| | 26 Tháng 7 2011 18:34 |
| | Hi Lein,
I see that you are right. Turkish is my language, I understand that my sentences is not very clear in english. I'll try to explain;
The woman take the love and betrayel from the God, and wear them. So the woman put on the love and the betrayal like she wear a skirt. (it is a literal text)
God creates the pain. He swathes the pain, and leaves it at the door of a house. The house belongs a man.
And yes, I mean a dead body. The woman in this text, is a bad one. And the man loves her, so he becomes a poem, as a result of his deep feelings. Because of the wickedness of the woman, he is like a corpse, but a breathing one. |
| | 27 Tháng 7 2011 13:50 |
| LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | Thanks ekızılok, that was very helpful!
I have made some changes and set a poll. Please let me know if you don't agree with anything in the text and I will be happy to change it |
| | 27 Tháng 7 2011 14:04 |
| | God created Love, then Betrayal...> God created first Love, then Betrayal
She gave birth to her lies between her dirty legs...>She gave birth to the lies between dirty legs...>
and left it outside the house of a man...>... left it the door of a man |
| | 29 Tháng 7 2011 22:55 |
| | - "God created Love, then Betrayal..." > God created Love first (adverb, not adjective)
- "She gave birth to her lies between her dirty legs" > She gave birth to the lies between her dirty legs
- "...left it outside the house of a man." > left it the door of a man
- "you'll be a poem or a breathing corpse which is breathing" > You will be either a poem or a corpse which can breathe
- "saw the betrayal" > tasted the betrayal |
| | 1 Tháng 8 2011 19:17 |
| | or a breathing corpse which is breathing...> or a corpse which can breathe . |
| | 1 Tháng 8 2011 21:06 |
| | "...left it outside the house of a man." > left it by the door of a man
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| | 4 Tháng 8 2011 01:15 |
| | l think that this translation almost is good but ıt may be corrected some words |
| | 4 Tháng 8 2011 16:08 |
| | şair =poet ilk cümle eksik. son cümle için seçilen kip yanlış. "or" ile başlayan kısımdaki çeviri de fazladan kelime kullanımı var. |
| | 4 Tháng 8 2011 21:55 |
| | Merhabalar,
Lütfen öneride bulunurken daha açık olunuz ki oylamaya sunan uzmanın işi kolaylaşsın. Ayrıca oylamaya sunan uzman Türkçe bilmiyor; dolayısıyla yorumlarınızı İnglizce yazmalısın.
CC: Mundoikar esra palace |
| | 9 Tháng 8 2011 12:38 |
| LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | Thank you all!
I have made a few minor changes based on some of the suggestions above. Ekızılok, please let me know if you don't agree |
| | 9 Tháng 8 2011 13:09 |
| | One more thing, Lein.
Poem > Poet |
| | 9 Tháng 8 2011 13:11 |
| LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | Aha! Yes, that makes more sense, thanks! |