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讨论区 灌水 - 社会 / 人民 / 政治 | J'erre, seul dans mes pensées, je ... | | 源语言: 法语
J'erre, seul dans mes pensées, je flâne, j'écoute, je rêve d'un monde où l'égalité règne. Impossible ? Malheureusement, dure réalité, il faut seulement accepter. Je me bats tant bien que mal pour enlever la violence et la discrimination, je ne récolte que la haine et l'incompréhension.
| | bonjours ou bonsoir ^^. je fais de la musique à mes heures perdues et j'ai gribouillé quelques lignes qui je trouve me reflètent bien. je souhaiterais traduire cette "chanson" en anglais britannique pour que je puisse la chanter sans avoir l'air trop nul :). je vous remercie d'avance. |
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| I'm wandering, alone in my thoughts, I’m hanging around,... | | 目的语言: 英语
I'm wandering, alone in my thoughts, I’m hanging around, I’m listening, I’m dreaming of a world where equality reigns. Impossible? Unfortunately, cruel reality, you must just accept it. I fight with difficulty to remove the violence and discrimination, I harvest nothing but hate and incomprehension. |
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由 Lein认可或编辑 - 2011年 二月 1日 13:25
最近发帖 | | | | | 2011年 一月 31日 18:01 | | | Hi intikam
The English looks fine, so I have set a poll to see what others, whose French is better than mine, say about the translation.
Just one small thing: would 'I wander' not be a better translation than 'I nest'? 'Nesting' is more something like finding a place to stay, settling in, as far as I know, whereas it sounds more like here, the idea is that the person is wandering, walking, moving from here to there and back.
Please let me know if you agree!
Thanks! | | | 2011年 一月 31日 18:32 | | | I am wandering instead of 'I am nesting'. | | | 2011年 一月 31日 20:33 | | | Hi Lein
In first version it was used the verb "airer"(français)= to nestle- "J'aire, seul dans mes pensées..."-I'm nestling, alone in my thoughts...which means, metaphorical speaking, that I'm hiding in my thoughts,I am alone with my thoughts, which makes perfectly sense, because was figurative used. Then the text was edited by somebody and he used "errer"=to wander (you are right here),that's why I translated "to nestle" Maybe the one who edited thought: "laisser errer ses pensées"(french expression)but it's a bit repetitive to use in the same sentence the verbs "errer" and "flâner" (almost synonyms),that's why I think it's "airer" not "errer".(like before it was edited(in french) and as I translated) I think the real meaning it's not" I'm moving from a place to another(space), but "I'm hiding in my thoughts from others,alone". I don't want to translate word for word, I try first to understand the text. Maybe I'm wrong, I don't know, but the meaning it's also important. I translated like this,then it was edited, that's why it's different. Thank you very much for your message and also for asking my opinion. So, it depends...if they want to keep the verb "errer" or "airer". For "errer" you are perfectly right, it's "to wander". Thanks again | | | 2011年 一月 31日 22:33 | | | Hi all
I have just something to add. First, for the forth line:
- Je me bats tant bien que mal pour enlever la violence et la discrimination.
Tant bien que mal means difficilement, so we'd better change it with something like this:
I fight with difficulty to remove the violence and discrimination.
And for the last line, the translation of the word l'incompréhension must be incomprehension, if it was misunderstanding, it would be mal compréhension.
| | | 2011年 一月 31日 23:05 | | | merci beuacoup | | | 2011年 一月 31日 23:37 | | | Hi
I do not agree with intikam22, as a native French speaker I can tell "airer" is most of the time employed when it is about birds, and its use in poetry would be rather metaphorically heavy, while "errer" has a much more wide and opened meaning, not only "to wander". I also think the redundance of the notion "errer/flâner" is less "heavy" than using the verb "airer" talking about oneself. But this is just my personal opinion.
Bonsoir fabinou!
Nous avions corrigé "j'aire, seul dans mes pensées" et utilisé "j'erre, seul dans mes pensées", étant donné que la définition du verbe "airer" est "faire son nid", mais peut-être était-ce ce que vous désiriez exprimer?
Merci de me répondre, car c'est important pour obtenir une traduction qui soit fidèle à ce que vous avez voulu exprimer.
Bonne soirée! | | | 2011年 一月 31日 23:41 | | | c'était "errer" effectivement, excusez moi pour cette erreur | | | 2011年 二月 1日 00:16 | | | Merci pour la rapidité de votre réponse, fabinou!
Marjolein, the requester just confirmed he wanted to type "j'erre", so "I'm nesting" should be edited with either "I'm wandering" or another verb that is approaching this notion of "errance".
And Bilge is right as well, about "incomprehension", it matches the meaning better than "misunderstanding", there's a nuance between "incompréhension" and "méprise, malentendu, etc". So if you could edit this word as well, I think the rest of the translation is OK.
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