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18 April 2008 16:06 |
| | Hi Goncin,
Come on! You are a poet...what about some rhyme here? 
Work on it a little bit more, I know you can get a better version. OK? 
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18 April 2008 16:20 |
| | "in the dirt" would rhyme with "from the heart"
...but I'm awful at poetry   |
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18 April 2008 17:22 |
| | "dirt" and "heart" rhyme? Really?  My pronounciation has to be awful then....  CC: Francky5591 |
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18 April 2008 17:26 |
| |  That goes well with my awfulness in poetry, so...
Not that different in pronounciation though, closer than "ground" anyway |
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18 April 2008 17:32 |
| | I think "dart", the game with the arrows, would fit better ("dart" and "heart" is quite nice, isn't it?  ). So what about:
A basket, my darling, a basket,
A basket from the heart,
One of Amor's arrows hit me,
when he was playing dart.
CC: Francky5591 |
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18 April 2008 17:47 |
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18 April 2008 18:14 |
| | Oh, we just say "Dart" so I forgot the "s". Maybe we should really give Goncy's poetry a chance and create our own poet We've already got one line, so now it's your turn CC: Francky5591 |
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18 April 2008 18:24 |
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18 April 2008 18:26 |
| | But wouldn't that be changing the original text too much, or can you do that? |
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18 April 2008 18:48 |
| | You wanted rhymes, you got them! |
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18 April 2008 19:03 |
| | NOW, THAT'S POETRY!!!
I knew you would do it! |
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18 April 2008 19:52 |
| | It's really good! So much better than my "suggestion" |
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18 April 2008 20:22 |
| | Keep on trying, kids! 
A basket, my darling, a basket,
A basket from the heart,
One of Amor's arrows hit me,
when he was playing dart.
That was really funny! |
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18 April 2008 20:27 |
| | My Gosh! You have done a great job!
This is a poem! You don't have only my vote, you became my idol! |
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18 April 2008 20:46 |
| | Less, Diego_Kovags, less... |
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18 April 2008 21:47 |
| | Hehehe... "Escolinha do Professor Raimundo" |
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I know, it is my fault, I began to post besides the topic with my awful first post)
