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Translation - Latyn-Engels - Sortitus erat a natura nobiles ad laudem impetus,...Current status Translation
Category Literature - Society / People / Politics | Sortitus erat a natura nobiles ad laudem impetus,... | | Source language: Latyn
Sortitus erat a natura nobiles ad laudem impetus, sed quia doctrina non accessit, irae impotens, obstinataeque pervicaciae fuit. | Remarks about the translation | Voila, je reprends la lecture de l'abbé Lhomond histoire de me remettre dans le bain du latin ! Ici pas d'ambiguité, mais je n'arrive pas bien à traduire, il s'agit de la vie de Coriolan. J'ai déjà le début ("il était par le sort de nature noble...") mais le laudem me gène vraiment.. Merci d'avance |
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| He had received from a nature noble zeals ... | | Target language: Engels
He had received from nature noble zeals for glory, but because he didn't succeed in studying, no having control over his anger, he was filled by a never-ending stubbornness. | Remarks about the translation | he didn't succeed in stydying = he wasn't good at studying = he didn't learn well /literally: he didn't achieve this (the glory) by a study
he was full of a never-ending stubbornness = he remained permanently stubborn / heated |
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Laaste geakkrediteerde redigering deur lilian canale - 9 November 2009 20:29
Last messages | | | | | 5 November 2009 16:07 | | | I know I m a bit irritating But I don t agree with the translation (apart about that "sortitus erat" related part) for several reasons:
you have translated "irae impotens" in the same way as an absolute ablative. In my opinion here "irae impotens " is a consequence of "quia doctrina accessit" not a concurring cause.
With "doctrina" I think he intends "the knowledge of military tactics" , I ve read the following part of his book and it quotes the habit that Coriolanus had to not come back from battles without a military decoration.That s the "laudem".
And however I still think that a translation of "sortitus erat a natura " as "he was moved by nature to noble efforts to glory/merit" would fit more. | | | 5 November 2009 18:46 | | | Your proposition: "he was moved by nature to noble efforts to glory/merit"
My proposition: "He had received from a nature noble zeals for a glory"
Sorry but I can't see any big difference in a meaning of these sentences... They mean the same. Of course, we can sometimes replace an active voice by a passive voice translating from Latin... And THIS your proposition is also acceptable, but I've chosen the active version, because it is closer to the original in its grammatical structure. That's all...
"irae impotens". I didn't translate it as Abl. Absolutus.
impotens - disable of sth... in this case: of anger (irae). (=iram tenere non potest) | | | 5 November 2009 18:50 | | | AND "STUDING" of course can be "studing of military tactics"... but it is only default meaning which has to stay in our mind only... | | | 5 November 2009 19:31 | | | Hi Aneta,
I think Tarino's version is more understandable and correct in English. Your sentence is faulty.
"glory" and "nature" are uncountable nouns.
"wasn't succeed" is also wrong and there are a couple of misspellings. | | | 5 November 2009 19:37 | | | Yes, "glory" and "nature" are uncountable nouns... I don't know what you mean typing it Lilly... Did I use the nouns in a wrong way? Should they be without "a"?
wasn't succed --?> didn't succeed. Will be ok?
If you think it is still uncorrect, just reject it. I don't claim my English is perfect. | | | 5 November 2009 19:48 | | | I meant that uncountable nouns can't be preceded by "a" like you wrote: "from a nature", "for a glory"
wasn't successful
didn't succeed
"...he was full of a persistent stubbor ness." sounds awkward. "he was filled by a never-ending stubborness" would sound better.
| | | 5 November 2009 20:15 | | | Are you sure about stubborness instead of stubbornnes? My two dictionaries show sth different...?
| | | 5 November 2009 20:20 | | | Ops! I mixed up words (with 'stubbornest'), sorry. I think I need a break | | | 5 November 2009 20:22 | | | That's ok, Lilly. I can understand. I'm also tired nowadays...
So, I will edit the translation according to the rest of your suggestions in a moment... |
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