Translation - Frans-Engels - J'erre, seul dans mes pensées, je ...

Hi intikam

The English looks fine, so I have set a poll to see what others, whose French is better than mine, say about the translation.
Just one small thing: would 'I wander' not be a better translation than 'I nest'? 'Nesting' is more something like finding a place to stay, settling in, as far as I know, whereas it sounds more like here, the idea is that the person is wandering, walking, moving from here to there and back.
Please let me know if you agree!
Thanks!

I am wandering instead of 'I am nesting'.

Hi Lein
In first version it was used the verb "airer"(français)= to nestle- "J'aire, seul dans mes pensées..."-I'm nestling, alone in my thoughts...which means, metaphorical speaking, that I'm hiding in my thoughts,I am alone with my thoughts, which makes perfectly sense, because was figurative used. Then the text was edited by somebody and he used "errer"=to wander (you are right here),that's why I translated "to nestle" Maybe the one who edited thought: "laisser errer ses pensées"(french expression)but it's a bit repetitive to use in the same sentence the verbs "errer" and "flâner" (almost synonyms),that's why I think it's "airer" not "errer".(like before it was edited(in french) and as I translated) I think the real meaning it's not" I'm moving from a place to another(space), but "I'm hiding in my thoughts from others,alone". I don't want to translate word for word, I try first to understand the text. Maybe I'm wrong, I don't know, but the meaning it's also important. I translated like this,then it was edited, that's why it's different. Thank you very much for your message and also for asking my opinion. So, it depends...if they want to keep the verb "errer" or "airer". For "errer" you are perfectly right, it's "to wander". Thanks again

Hi all

I have just something to add. First, for the forth line:

- Je me bats tant bien que mal pour enlever la violence et la discrimination.

Tant bien que mal means difficilement, so we'd better change it with something like this:

I fight with difficulty to remove the violence and discrimination.

And for the last line, the translation of the word l'incompréhension must be incomprehension, if it was misunderstanding, it would be mal compréhension.

merci beuacoup

Hi

I do not agree with intikam22, as a native French speaker I can tell "airer" is most of the time employed when it is about birds, and its use in poetry would be rather metaphorically heavy, while "errer" has a much more wide and opened meaning, not only "to wander". I also think the redundance of the notion "errer/flâner" is less "heavy" than using the verb "airer" talking about oneself. But this is just my personal opinion.

Bonsoir fabinou!
Nous avions corrigé "j'aire, seul dans mes pensées" et utilisé "j'erre, seul dans mes pensées", étant donné que la définition du verbe "airer" est "faire son nid", mais peut-être était-ce ce que vous désiriez exprimer?

Merci de me répondre, car c'est important pour obtenir une traduction qui soit fidèle à ce que vous avez voulu exprimer.

Bonne soirée!

c'était "errer" effectivement, excusez moi pour cette erreur

Merci pour la rapidité de votre réponse, fabinou!

Marjolein, the requester just confirmed he wanted to type "j'erre", so "I'm nesting" should be edited with either "I'm wandering" or another verb that is approaching this notion of "errance".
And Bilge is right as well, about "incomprehension", it matches the meaning better than "misunderstanding", there's a nuance between "incompréhension" and "méprise, malentendu, etc". So if you could edit this word as well, I think the rest of the translation is OK.