Vertaling - Portugees-Engels - Meu coração é um almirante louco

I support Tantine's version

profissão is occupation

But Tantine's version seems to me like this guy is saying that the reason for him to leave the sea life is his wish for "remembering" something.
Is it right, Tantine?

Who gave up his life at sea
[in order] To remember, at home, bit by bit

One more time having problems with poetry.

[8] We don't translate poems.

I agree with you, Casper:

"And remember it, little by little", and not "to remember it".

And I've noticed the word "job" as Lucila did. A job is more like an employment than a profession/occupation, right? I agree that "occupation" is better.

job => occupation.

Hi All

About the choice of the word "job" rather than "employment", "occupation", "profession" (etc) is the fact that the word is short and "to the point.

This translation is under the category "poetry", so poetic licence is not only "permitted", it is often "necessary", so as not to turn a short poetry into an Icelandic Saga

So I not only accept Diego's choice of this word, I applaud it.

Casper - I needed to change the "to" into "and", so now I think it's telling the right story =>

If I've got this right, the literal translation (into French) of:

e que a vai relembrando pouco a pouco
em casa a passear, a passear

would be

"et qui (s'en) va, rémemorant, peu à peu, à la maison, pour marcher, pour marcher"

My heart is a crazy admiral
Who gave up his life at sea
And remembers, at home, bit by bit
Wandering, wandering

I think it is telling the sad story of someone who regrets having given up on a relationship.

Since s/he (the heart) is no longer the "admiral" of that wonderful boat called "A love story", s/he can only sit alone (at home) and ruminate his/her regrets.

But I might be wrong

Bises
Tantine

[9] At cucumis we love (Tantine loves) translating poetry but we cannot promise to make it rhyme (Tantine often does).

I agree with Tantine's version
It's much better that way

to take a walk não me parece correcto para "a passear"

Nem a mim... parece estranho dizer isto, mas... parece que está demasiado dentro do contexto...

Por isso mesmo "wandering, wandering" ficaria muito melhor.

My heart is a crazy admiral
Who gave up his life at sea
and remembers it
little by little
wandering, wandering
at home.

[9] At cucumis we love translating poetry but we cannot promise to make it rhyme... and catch the very sense of it.

I like your last version.

"...we cannot promise to make it rhyme" hahahaha

ne e tochen prevodat

Zornitsa, could you speak english or maybe portuguese for us to understand you? Thanks

I like lilian canales version!

Lilians

Lilian's version.

"life" conveys much sooooo much more

I will edit, then validate

Bises/beijos
Tantine

Hi Lilian (in particular, anyone else in general)

I have edited this text using your (Lilian's) translation so, technically, Lilian should earn the points for this translation.

I will donate you the equivalent if you want

I'll validate now

Bises
Beijos
Tantine

Hi Tantine:

I'm glad my version was so well accepted, but...
if the points are to be donated, I think that in order to be fair, they should be divided among the many who gave suggestions, including yourself, so don't worry...thanks anyway.

Bises
Lilly.

I agree!

Lilian's verson
or
Tantine's version