Vertimas - Anglų-Arabų - Live your own

I believe it goes like this:
Since your death will belong only to you, so shall your life!
I will try to say it in a differen way:
Live your life like you're the only one who owns it, because afterall you're the only one who will own your death.
I'm gonna put it in arabic:
عش حياةً تكون ملكك، فموتك لن يملكه أحد سواك
Or else:
عش حياتك فلن تموت إلا مماتك
CC: elmota marhaban

Hi jaq84,

If I'll choose one, I would of go for the poem clause عش حياةً تكون ملكك، فموتك لن يملكه أحد سواك cause at the beginning I wanted it.

Now, literally, the other translation or mine fit well the requested translation.

What do you think the best to do?

C.K.

hmm, well CK, "ستخمد موتك بنفسك" i dont understand that part
if i had to choose i would choose the poetic one, but i guess we have to be a little more literal here (and leave the poetic one in the comments block) maybe:
عش حياتك وحدك, فلن تموت إلا وحدك
and in the comments box, lets leave the poetic and its translation as well, i think it translates to english much better than the original

Hi elmota,

I find this one is poor, but if it covers the requested translation so I'll edit it to what you have mentioned: عش حياتك وحدك, فلن تموت إلا وحدك.

But let's take it back into analyzing: Live your own life = عش حياتك الخاصة and Your own death = موتك الخاص so what do you think if we say: عش حياتك الخاصة لأنك ستمت موتك الخاص?

C.K.

err, i know i said we need to be more literal, but dont you think ur over killing it

live your own life is not the same as live your private life, its like saying: bring your own water, or buy your own ticket, so live your own life, dont tell somebody else to live it for you...
عيش حياتك لحالك
but what do you mean by: ستخمد
is it: putting out your own death?

Exactly

Hello C.K
What was your final decision?
What elmota said about:
ستخمد موتك بنفسك
makes it clear that it isn't an acceptable translation.
You said you meant"putting out your own death"
But that isn't what the original text suggests.
I hope you make up your mind soon.
Have a good day both.