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翻译的意思正确，但过于口语化。“我们公司”可以改为“本公司”，“希望”可以改为“愿”，“能够”不需要。

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sorry, I means:
The meaning is correct, but the text is too colloquial. Normallly, chinese people like to write polite. So, "我们公司"("Our company" of "staff of our company" in chinese) can be change to “本公司”, “希望”("wish" in chinese) can be changed to “愿”, "could" do not needin the polite form. (literally in chinese: "Wish you could have good health and all the best "

a very typical chinese tournure.

@ Hi Vilson Yao,
Please post your comments in English so that the expert evaluating the translation will be able to understand.

@ lij899,
I didn't understand your comment

@ to both of you:
Please, when you state that a translation may be improved you have to give the suggestion you have, otherwise we don't know what you think is wrong .

CC: Cisa lij899 Vilson Yao

not bad

Hi again Vilson Yao,

Actually, the Chinese text is the original which was submitted to us. We can't change the vocabulary it uses. Cisa just translated it the way it is.
What we are judging here is the translation into English, not the original in Chinese.
Do you think the translation conveys the original (the way it is, not the way it should be)?

CC: Vilson Yao

Ok. The english translation is fine.