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| | 5 Junho 2008 02:14 |
| | Hi Lein,
"lately" in the first sentence does not sound well.
I guess the person is no longer there and "lately" includes the present moment, so parhaps you should use: " a little ago" or something like that.
"And Dorel keeps saying just forget Adi, I think..."
This line needs some punctuation, it should read:
"And Dorel keeps saying: "just forget Adi". I think..."
"Because I will never forget you. You are much too important to me to do so, my sweetheart."
After "OK" we need a question mark (?)
"And how you used to look at me all the time" would sound better. |
| | 5 Junho 2008 11:11 |
| LeinNúmero de mensagens: 3389 | OK, changed 'lately to 'a short while ago'
Do you prefer to correct missing punctuation, rather than following the original? I left out the punctuation because the original has none, but put it in now.
Changed the next line and question mark.
I left 'were looking at me' because it refers only to the time during the visit / encounter. 'Used to look at me' would be referring to a longer period of time. |
| | 5 Junho 2008 19:21 |
| | Well Lein, but " how you were looking at me" does not sound well.
What about:
"the way you looked (kept looking) at me" ? |
| | 5 Junho 2008 19:25 |
| LeinNúmero de mensagens: 3389 | |
| | 5 Junho 2008 20:37 |
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It should be "MEANING ONLY", because the source-text isn't written with attention enough on signs: . , " and spaces between them and the next word.
Also there are a lot of gramatically errors. |
| | 5 Junho 2008 21:58 |
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Hello Lilian,
I'm puzzled, because my Romanian translation,based on English one, vanished; without it, Lein has worked in vain, since the request was for Romanian. Do you happen to know where did it go?
Thank you!
P.S. I was disappointed when I've realized that I can't send you a postcard, too.
Madeleine |
| | 6 Junho 2008 00:06 |
| | Thanks Rodrigues, it's "meaning only" now.
And Madeleine,
I don't know how you happen to lose so many translations!
Your Romanian version of this request is there in a poll set by iepurica, being voted. It didn't "vanish". CC: MÃ¥ddie |
| | 6 Junho 2008 10:27 |
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Hi Lilian,
This is the first one I've ever "lost"
Thank you for your answer!
Madeleine |