Traduction - Turc-Anglais - Ayrýlýk günü düþtü peþime hüzün Ve býrakmadý kaç...

Hi kfeto,

confusing text (poem?) , anyway there are some things I'd like to make clear.

"The day of separation" should read : "On the day of separation, (we need a comma here)

... reached out with all my might for you

"but you were not facing me" I didn't get that. Could it be "but you would not face me" (you didn't want to face me)?

"Fooled by you I awaited last autumn
and I persevered for several years."

This is confusing because "last autumn" must have been at most a year ago, so how could s/he have persevered for "several years"?
See what I mean?

"The fact I came to you afterwards
is because of the promise I made you that day."

This is correct, however I think it would sound lighter reducing it to:

"I came to you afterwards
for the promise I made you that day"

What do you think?

ok, thank you lilian, i incorporated/corrected everything.
the last bit i'd rather leave because like this its closer to the original which is also 'heavy'
you were right about the autumn
about the face: litt it says "your face was not turned towards me" so i dont know how to render that

OK, let's decide that "face" stuff at the poll.

Still about the "autumn passing", I wonder if what it means is that he was waiting for the autumn to end.
In that case it would be better:

"Fooled by you, I waited for the autumn to be over"

litt it says: i awaited the autumn /that had passed/ or /that was passing/

"waiting for the autumn to end" would make more sense but is in turkish very different: "guzun gecmesini bekledim"

lilian how is your french btw;-) i just saw theres is french version. sadly my french is not exactly up to it

Oh, yes, looking at the French version I would say that my guess was correct.
" j’ai attendu l’automne passé " means:
"I waited for the autumn to pass"

hmmm wouldn't that be "attendu la passage d'automne"?
im pretty sure thats not what it says in turkish

but fine, just so long as it passes the poll...

no, "j'ai attendu l'automne passé" is a poetic way, a little old fashioned, to say :"J'ai attendu que passe l'automne", ou "j'ai attendu que l'automne passe"...

ok, thanks, francky and lilian,
i edited