Μετάφραση - Πορτογαλικά Βραζιλίας-Λατινικά - Os Grandes Seres Exaltação! Na presença...

Can I ask you a bridge for evaluation, please?
(when you have time, of course)

CC: lilian canale

"The Great Beings

Exaltation!
In the fortifying presence of the Good
Which reveals malignant souls
Now pacified,
I can see beyond
The great circle of immortality,
Where dwells
The Divine Light
The Absolute Light
Leading
The silence of the soul,
The warriors of the spirit
To the gray and beautiful kingdom
The control of the elements of nature."

Thank you!

Good job, goncin!


Anyway, some corrections of mine:

Animationes magnas => Animationes (or better: Animantes / Creationes) magnae;

Exaltatio! => Inflammatio animi (Latin "exaltatio" isn’t the same as English “exaltation”);

Palam bono fortificante, => fortificante--> confirmante);

Animas maleficas detegente => “maleficas” seems to be too strong here. I propose: malignas;

Quae iam mansuefactantur => correct form of “perfectum passivum” is mansuefactae sunt;

Ultra videre possum => ultra --> extra;

Magnum circulum imortalitatis => just an order: circulum magnum. Dear goncin, an attributive adjective stands after a noun in Latin;

Ubi incollit

Lux divina

Lux absoluta

Quae ducit

Silentium animae

Bellatores spiritus

Ad regnum caesium ac formosum, => "formosum" --> speciosum / splendidum (thinking of abstracts). “Formosa” can be e.g. “puella”;

Dominium in elementa naturae. => Dominium elementorum naturae

Gratias tibi ago.