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Translation - French-English - Mon géniteur. La tête se déchire Le cœur cogne ...Current status Translation
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Category Free writing  This translation request is "Meaning only". | Mon géniteur. La tête se déchire Le cœur cogne ... | | Source language: French
Mon géniteur.
La tête se déchire
Le cœur cogne
Tu as sans vergogne
pris ma liberté.
Tu fus mon père
Tu es parti
mais la douleur reste encore
me privant, à jamais, de ma sérénité.
J'étais un enfant
sans défense
L'enfant a grandit
sans avoir comprit
Tu m'as imploré mon pardon
que je ne pouvais te donner
Tu es parti sans,
et moi, je reste,
les ailes brisées à jamais.
Tu es parti
sans que j'ai pu te dire
que le père que tu fus avant
me manque et que je l'aime
Maintenant les larmes peuvent enfin couler. | Remarks about the translation | I would like if Lilian would accept to translate these words for me, although she is overworked,
but I'm not in a hurry. |
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My genitor.
The head tears
The heart pounds
You have, shamelessly
taken my freedom.
You were my father
You are gone
but the pain still remains
depriving me, forever, of my serenity.
I was a child
defenseless
The child has grown up
unable to understand
You've begged my pardon
which I couldn't give you
You left without,
and I remain,
wings broken forever.
You're gone
and I could not tell you
that I miss the father you were before
and that I love him
Now the tears can finally flow |
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Validated by Bamsa - 29 September 2009 08:39
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28 September 2009 01:01 | | | I hope you are not disappointed, Lene 
I did my best. | | |
28 September 2009 01:09 | | 
gamineNumber of messages: 4611 | | | |
28 September 2009 01:13 | | | Oh, thanks, dear Lene.  I'm glad you liked my version, I didn't try to get any rhyme since deep feelings don't need to rhyme, just to be honestly expressed.
That's a beautiful poem.  | | |
28 September 2009 01:28 | |
gamineNumber of messages: 4611 | | | |
28 September 2009 09:12 | | | Fine, but excuse me, isn't possible to translate "géniteur" into english.
Il y a là comme un sens second, à ne pas vouloir dire "mon père" comme pour lui dénier ce rôle 
Bonne semaine à toutes et tous | | |
28 September 2009 15:17 | |
gamineNumber of messages: 4611 | Yes, Burduff, of course you're right, but it just that I didn't want to discuss this translation too
much, and I really find Lilian's translation perfect. But of course we could translate this word "géniteur" into English, perhaps "procreator".
Can you do it, Lilian, please. And thanks again.
CC: Burduf | | |
28 September 2009 15:40 | | | Beautiful poem and excellent translation! I was moved so much... | | |
28 September 2009 15:48 | |
gamineNumber of messages: 4611 | Thanks little one.  And as you say: excellent
translation.  | | |
28 September 2009 16:11 | | | Actually I was in doubt about whether I should translate "géniteur" as "genitor", which even being the scientific noun for parent, it establishes a distance, a lack of affection in the relationship.
If that is what you meant, Lene, I'll edit. | | |
28 September 2009 23:14 | |
gamineNumber of messages: 4611 | Well, it's quite funny, Lilian, because I didn't know it myself, before Burduff spoke about it, and I realised that, actually, he was right. So, yes, please, if you could correct it to genitor it would be fine. And one more time, thanks so much, dear Lilian. CC: Burduf |
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Joking. Now I'll go to bed . Enjoy your evening. And thanks for your big heart. 
