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Šis tulkojums pieprasa tikai nozīmi.
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Искорка твоей души,однажды пронзившая моё...
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Submitted by irini
Source language: Russian

Искорка твоей души,однажды пронзившая моё сердце,разбудила в нём вулкан чувств из
которого вырос огненный цветок вечно пылающей страсти и любви к тебе Посмотри на небо...
Видишь звёзды Прислушася каждая из них шепчет о том как я люблю тебя Солнышко

Title
Once the sparklet of your soul ...
Translation
English

Translated by ViaLuminosa
Target language: English

Once the sparklet of your soul pierced my heart, it roused a volcano of feelings, from which а flower of eternal flame and love for you grew.
Look at the sky...
You see the stars(?) Listen, each one (of them) whispers a tale about the love I feel for you, Sunny.
Validated by lilian canale - 12 June 2008 16:25





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11 June 2008 23:27

Linak
Number of messages: 48
I think this line is missing from the translation "Посмотри на небо..." - Take a look at the sky...

12 June 2008 00:03

Cinderella
Number of messages: 773
I agree with Linak about missing line.

Искорка - little spark

12 June 2008 06:11

katranjyly
Number of messages: 102
Посмотри на небо not translated. "is whispering" would be better than "whisper". And could we do without the word "tale", there is no word like this in the original.

12 June 2008 09:02

ViaLuminosa
Number of messages: 1116
Yes, I omitted the part with the sky, thanks! About whether we could do without the tale, I'm not sure if it would be correct to say "they whisper about my love" in English, if it is, OK. Let's see what the expert would say.

12 June 2008 11:45

Guzel_R
Number of messages: 225
Мне кажется, что "grew up" не подходит, так как имеет значение стал взрослым, и лучше "grew" в значении произрос.
А цветок не просто цветок, он еще и огненный, поэтому думаю, что нужно добавить "fiery flower"
А, вообще, текст жутко "кудрявый", тяжело передать смысл.
It seems to me that it's not correct to use "grew up" because it means "became adult" and better to use "grew".
And the flower is not just flower it's "огненный" so I'd add "fiery flower"
Really, the text is rather complicated and it's very hard to translate

12 June 2008 11:48

Guzel_R
Number of messages: 225
Забыла добавить про звезды, которые шепчут
Почему бы не перевести как
"Listen to them, each one of them is wispering how I love you"
I forgot to say about wispering stars
Why should it be translated like:
"Listen to them, each one of them is wispering how I love you"?

12 June 2008 12:49

ViaLuminosa
Number of messages: 1116
The text is not composed properly, first of all...
"The fiery flower of flame" is tautology and sounds clumsily in any language. And (as I said above), I'm not sure if a phrase like "...is whispering how I..." or "...whispers about my..." would be correct in English. I think not.

12 June 2008 13:42

katranjyly
Number of messages: 102
ViaLuminosa you translate Солнышко as "my sun". What about "Sunny"?

12 June 2008 15:08

ViaLuminosa
Number of messages: 1116
Sounds good.