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 本翻译"仅需意译"。 | ИÑкорка твоей души,однажды Ð¿Ñ€Ð¾Ð½Ð·Ð¸Ð²ÑˆÐ°Ñ Ð¼Ð¾Ñ‘... | | 源语言: 俄语
ИÑкорка твоей души,однажды Ð¿Ñ€Ð¾Ð½Ð·Ð¸Ð²ÑˆÐ°Ñ Ð¼Ð¾Ñ‘ Ñердце,разбудила в нём вулкан чувÑтв из
которого Ð²Ñ‹Ñ€Ð¾Ñ Ð¾Ð³Ð½ÐµÐ½Ð½Ñ‹Ð¹ цветок вечно пылающей ÑтраÑти и любви к тебе ПоÑмотри на небо...
Видишь звёзды ПриÑлушаÑÑ ÐºÐ°Ð¶Ð´Ð°Ñ Ð¸Ð· них шепчет о том как Ñ Ð»ÑŽÐ±Ð»ÑŽ Ñ‚ÐµÐ±Ñ Ð¡Ð¾Ð»Ð½Ñ‹ÑˆÐºÐ¾ |
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| Once the sparklet of your soul ... | | 目的语言: 英语
Once the sparklet of your soul pierced my heart, it roused a volcano of feelings, from which а flower of eternal flame and love for you grew.
Look at the sky...
You see the stars(?) Listen, each one (of them) whispers a tale about the love I feel for you, Sunny. |
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2008年 六月 11日 23:27 | | | I think this line is missing from the translation "ПоÑмотри на небо..." - Take a look at the sky... | | |
2008年 六月 12日 00:03 | | | I agree with Linak about missing line.
ИÑкорка - little spark | | |
2008年 六月 12日 06:11 | | | ПоÑмотри на небо not translated. "is whispering" would be better than "whisper". And could we do without the word "tale", there is no word like this in the original. | | |
2008年 六月 12日 09:02 | | | Yes, I omitted the part with the sky, thanks!  About whether we could do without the tale, I'm not sure if it would be correct to say "they whisper about my love" in English, if it is, OK. Let's see what the expert would say. | | |
2008年 六月 12日 11:45 | | | Мне кажетÑÑ, что "grew up" не подходит, так как имеет значение Ñтал взроÑлым, и лучше "grew" в значении произроÑ.
Рцветок не проÑто цветок, он еще и огненный, поÑтому думаю, что нужно добавить "fiery flower"
Ð, вообще, текÑÑ‚ жутко "кудрÑвый", Ñ‚Ñжело передать ÑмыÑл.
It seems to me that it's not correct to use "grew up" because it means "became adult" and better to use "grew".
And the flower is not just flower it's "огненный" so I'd add "fiery flower"
Really, the text is rather complicated and it's very hard to translate | | |
2008年 六月 12日 11:48 | | | Забыла добавить про звезды, которые шепчут
Почему бы не перевеÑти как
"Listen to them, each one of them is wispering how I love you"
I forgot to say about wispering stars
Why should it be translated like:
"Listen to them, each one of them is wispering how I love you"? | | |
2008年 六月 12日 12:49 | | | The text is not composed properly, first of all...
"The fiery flower of flame" is tautology and sounds clumsily in any language. And (as I said above), I'm not sure if a phrase like "...is whispering how I..." or "...whispers about my..." would be correct in English. I think not.
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2008年 六月 12日 13:42 | | | ViaLuminosa you translate Солнышко as "my sun". What about "Sunny"? | | |
2008年 六月 12日 15:08 | | | Sounds good. |
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