Tłumaczenie - Turecki-Angielski - Bak ÅŸimdi; ben sana ne algıladığımı söyleyeyim;...

Bak şimdi; ben sana ne algıladığımı söyleyeyim:
Senin gönderindeki tahlillerin elbette dikkate değer!
Ama çok kişisel!..
İnsanlar anlamak istediklerini anladıkları hâlde işi anlaşılmazlığın o dayanılmaz hafifliğine vuruyorsa;
Ben sana sadece bir şey söylerim; tek kelime: "SAMİMİYETSİZLİK"
Şimdi ben kabayım! Ama dürüstüm!
İnce ve kibar olup yılan olmaktansa, kaba olup aslan gibi kükremek iyidir...
Umarım kinayeyi anlarsın.
İnsanlarla aslanlar arasında anlaşma olmaz arkadaşım, olmaz!..

Hi rollingmaster

Sorry it has taken so long to start evaluating this translation

A few remarks about the English text before I set a poll:

- 'perceived' sounds rather formal and is not often used between friends. How about 'noticed'?
- 'the assays in your mail are notable -> this sounds very unnatural. Could 'assays' be 'descriptions'? Do you know if the sentence refers to an email or a letter? (It sounds like it is about an email to me.) And how about 'noteworthy' or 'significant' for 'notable' (dikkate deÄŸer)? It seems to sound more natural here. (lots of translations found here
- 'If people play unbearable frivolity of inscrutability' -> sounds unnatural and the meaning is not quite clear to an English reader. Do you mean something like 'If people pretend to be confused or make jokes about it'? If not, could you explain what the text means?
- 'allusion': again, a very formal word. How about 'I hope you understand what I mean'?
- Finally, the last sentence seems to contradict the one before ('it is better to be a lion than a snake <-> people don't like lions'. Is that the same in the original text?

Sorry for all the questions - I hope you can help me understand the text! Thanks!

Rollingmaster?

Hi Lein,

It's okey. By the way, I'm sorry for answering late. I just saw your message.

- "Noticed"
- I didn't understand what "tahlil" means in here. 'noteworthy' is suitable.
- To pretend not to understand
- It's up to you. In Turkish version, it was given as "allusion".
- People don't get along with lions

I hope I could help you.

Thanks rollingmaster, that was very helpful

I think we should take account of the part of "the unbearable frivolity of inscrutability"

OK, I have put it in the remarks. Would you agree with the way I have written this?

OK. That's better.