Not the torturer will scare me Nor the body's final fall Nor the barrels of death's rifles Nor the shadows on the wall Nor the night when to the ground The last dim star of pain is hurled But the blind indifference Of a merciless unfeeling world
And each small candle Lights a corner of the dark...
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From a song by Roger Waters Source: http://www.roger-waters.com/candle.html
Please keep sense and meaning, translations have not necessarily got to be as poetical (but if you have nice lyrical ideas, don't hesitate to use them).^^
Det er ikke torturen der vil skræmme mig Heller ikke kroppens sidste fald Heller ikke løbet af dødens gevær Heller ikke skyggerne på muren Heller ikke natten, når til jorden Den sidste svage stjerne af smerte er kastet Men den blinde ligegyldighed Af en ubarmhjertig ufølende verden
Og hvert lille lys Oplyser et hjørne af mørket...
Dernière édition ou validation par wkn - 23 Avril 2007 13:37
In Danish "the torturer" cannot be translated with "torturen", since this is "the torture" (the act) and not the person performing it, which is "tortøren". Likewise "barrels" and "rifles" should be translated in plural to "løbene" and "geværer" and not only in singular as here. The word "Heller" can be left out entirely as can also the two first words "Det er" and the fifth word "der". In Danish poetry it is not normal to use capital letters in the beginning of each line. "Dim" may be better translated with the Danish word "tågede" (hazy, misty, foggy) rather than with "svage" (weak). I think "is hurled" should be translated "smides" (is thrown), "kastes" (is thrown), "kastes af sted" (is thrown off) or "hvirvles væk" (is hurled away).