Оригинальный текст - Французский - Herbe douce

Bonjour,
Est ce que vous penser que ma traduction est correcte?

Soft grass


At its eighth day
Wagtail
The well-named

At its eighth year
Wagtail
The beloved
On a trunk
Its burst head

After eight years
Wagtail
Your executioner prisoner
His head purified

Confessed words
Affirmed freedom

In your beak
Wagtail
A soft grass *
Flown away.


* Kigali 2002

Hi La fourmi autodidacte,

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Merci Lilian