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Translation - Arabic-English - ريت الرياض قد لبس ثوبًا جديد من Ù†Ùوار Øوله بنÙسج...Current status Translation
Category Poetry - Education | ريت الرياض قد لبس ثوبًا جديد من Ù†Ùوار Øوله بنÙسج... | | Source language: Arabic
ريت الرياض قد لبس
ثوبًا جديد من Ù†Ùوار
Øوله بنÙسج Ùˆ آس
Ùˆ Øبق مع الجÙلّÙنار
إذا يهÙبّ٠النسيم
تَشÙمّ٠مÙسكَ الزَّهرْ
يا قلبي بينَ القلوبْ
ما لَكْ دَوَا أو طبيب
زاراني المَليØÙ’ ÙÙŠ سÙرÙورْ
أَقْبَلْ Ø¥Ùلى مَنْزÙÙÙ„ÙÙŠ
عَمÙلْت٠Øَضْرَة زÙÙ‡Ùورْ
والظَّبْي٠ÙÙŠ Ù…ÙŽØÙ’ÙÙŽÙ„ÙÙŠ | Remarks about the translation | it's literary arabic and I would like to translate it in french spanish or/and english |
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| I saw them wearing, those gardens a new outfit made ... | TranslationEnglish
Translated by  tarakbr | Target language: English
I saw them wearing, those gardens
A new outfit made of sublime roses
With myrtles and violets around
Basil with grenadine flowers do abound
Whenever the breeze lightly blows
You smell the scent of an exquisite rose
Oh, my heart among all others
No medicine can cure, no doctors
The pretty graced me with her presence
And honored my house with her existence
I made a bunch of flowers swiftly
For the antelope in my assembly
| Remarks about the translation | I tried to keep a kind of rhyme. So a few additions were needed. |
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12 September 2008 01:18 | | | tarakbr,
It seems that the votes are positive for your good job, however I'd like you to explain the last two lines, please.
Could you say that in other words so that I'll be able to understand? | | |
13 September 2008 12:31 | | | Hi Lilian,
Here is how I interpreted and accordingly translated the last two lines:
عَمÙلْت٠Øَضْرَة زÙÙ‡Ùورْ
والظَّبْي٠ÙÙŠ Ù…ÙŽØÙ’ÙÙŽÙ„ÙÙŠ
the above lines basically mean:
I prepared flowers
For the pretty girl who is among my guests (literally: in my party)
الظَّبْيÙ: is in fact antelope. In Arabic, it can be used to refer to a pretty, sexy girl as antelopes are thought to be endowed with a perfect shape and a gracious agility.
I used/added "swiftly" to rhyme with "assembly" (gathering).
I hope my explanation can be helpful.
Regards,
tarak | | |
13 September 2008 14:30 | | | Thanks for your explanation tarakbr,
I think I got that now. It's always a challenge translating poetry. You've done it finely.
I'll validate this one right away. | | |
14 September 2008 00:14 | | | Hi Lilian,
I am glad you found my translation worthwhile.
However,I'd like to rectify the first line: "I saw they were" to the more correct: "I saw they wear".
Thank you so much for your patience and your time.
Kind regards,
tarak | | |
14 September 2008 01:24 | | | Hi,
Well...now you confused me... 
"I saw they were, those gardens
A new outfit made of sublime roses" makes sense to me, however
"I saw they wear, those gardens
A new outfit made of sublime roses" doesn't.
Now, you'll have to explain the line to me. 
The gardens wear a new outfit...? If so, the line should be:
"I saw the m wearing, those gardens
A new outfit made of sublime roses"
Or maybe not...  You tell me! 
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14 September 2008 02:13 | | | Yes Lilian,
I do agree
"I saw them wearing, those gardens
A new outfit made of sublime roses"
is much better than mine
Thanks! 
No more bothering/confusing you  | | |
14 September 2008 04:42 | | | Good!
Because I intend to do the translation into Spanish.  |
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