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| | 27 Oktober 2007 19:39 |
| | I have made quite a few edits here, and I have one question for you: Do you really mean "feedback" (an opinion expressed about something) or should it be "response"? |
| | 27 Oktober 2007 20:24 |
| piasAnzahl der Beiträge: 8113 | Thank you for correcting...I know, sometimes my way of writing english is clumsy. I'm working on that
I checked the word feedback and when translating the danish word 'tilbagemelding' it says either feedback or reaction. Does that sounds strange? |
| | 27 Oktober 2007 23:57 |
| | Well ... it depends - as I said above, giving feedback means giving an opinion, not just a response to someone's inquiry. So if the correspondent had said something like "I really like your website", that would be feedback, but if he had said something like "We are interested in your company," that would be a response, because there is no opinion expressed. |
| | 28 Oktober 2007 04:29 |
| piasAnzahl der Beiträge: 8113 | ok, I really dont know what the rest of the text is saying, this part that should be translated is saying nothing about it, but my guess is that the reciever had produced some sort of proposal...
Maybe, It is best to be more like neutral, and write to your sugest: respons.
Should I correct that?
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| | 28 Oktober 2007 10:02 |
| | About the response-feedback discussion: it really should be "response" and not feedback in this context.
Some other comments:
(1) In the Danish text, it doesn´t say "we will get back to you AGAIN", just "we will get back to you".
(2) "Oplæg" = "proposal" and not "further information".
(3) The sentence that starts "Allerede nu barsler vi med en anderledes og spændende indgangsvinkel" actually says "Already now we are giving birth to a different and exciting approach" --> Barsle = give birth to (figuratively) and indgangsvinkel = approach.
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| | 28 Oktober 2007 09:34 |
| piasAnzahl der Beiträge: 8113 | Thank you Anita_Luciano for your feedback!
I think you know what you are talking about, so I will make thoose corrections.
I hope that is ok. Kafetzou...??
I'll try and see what you think. |
| | 28 Oktober 2007 14:52 |
| | A agree with all of these corrections except for the "giving birth to" one. Even though everyone will understand it, it sounds awkward in English. I actually like your original idea of "hatching" better, so I will change it back.
Also, we don't begin sentences with "already now" in English, so I will change the word order.
Is this OK with you two now? |
| | 28 Oktober 2007 14:54 |
| piasAnzahl der Beiträge: 8113 | Absolute |
| | 28 Oktober 2007 15:03 |
| | yes, it sounds much better now! I liked the verb "hatching" in this context.
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