As a child I was afraid on the streets after dark. When I was young I feared people after dark. Now I'm afraid of loneliness, everytime night falls.
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karanlik can mean darkness in general but here it refers to nighfall especially in the last line i tried to keep the structure of the poem intact as much possible
Senast granskad eller redigerad av dramati - 5 April 2008 19:11
because like i wrote in the remarks here it refers more specifically to the darkness which comes after nightfall.
the poem's three lines are connected in the sense that they build up to the climax in the third.
the connection is always the nightfall, thats why i deviated from darkness in the the first line, luckily in english using 'after dark' allows one to retain the word dark, and thus the structure while making clear it's after nightfall
The problem here kfeto is that the structure is wrong. We are afraid of something (the street, de darkness). I understand that this is a poem and we should try to keep its form, but the sentence in English needs another construction.
You have to respect a sequence of adverbs and "after dark" should come at the end.
you can say:
"As a child I was afraid of the darkness on/of the streets"
or
"As a child I was frightened of the dark streets"
or
"As a child I was afraid of the streets after dark"
Or the other suggestions I gave, but the way the sentence is now, sorry, but it's not correct.
"Korkardım", "I used to be afraid" olması lazım. Ve bence kalanlık kelimesinin üçü de "dark" ya da "darkness" olarak çevirilse daha güzel olacak.