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Hi kfeto
"As a child I was afraid after dark on the streets."

Do you mean "I was afraid of the streets after dark" or "I was afraid of being/staying on the street after dark"?

hello lilian
literally it says 'i was afraid of the dark[ness] on the streets' so not your first suggestion but more the second.

first line he fears the dark[ness] itself

So..."I was afraid of the darkness on the streets" would be correct.
Why don't you edit that way? It sounds fine.

because like i wrote in the remarks here it refers more specifically to the darkness which comes after nightfall.
the poem's three lines are connected in the sense that they build up to the climax in the third.

the connection is always the nightfall, thats why i deviated from darkness in the the first line, luckily in english using 'after dark' allows one to retain the word dark, and thus the structure while making clear it's after nightfall

The problem here kfeto is that the structure is wrong. We are afraid of something (the street, de darkness). I understand that this is a poem and we should try to keep its form, but the sentence in English needs another construction.
You have to respect a sequence of adverbs and "after dark" should come at the end.
you can say:

"As a child I was afraid of the darkness on/of the streets"
or
"As a child I was frightened of the dark streets"
or
"As a child I was afraid of the streets after dark"
Or the other suggestions I gave, but the way the sentence is now, sorry, but it's not correct.

So, what are you going to do?

I'm really making you earn those points arent I, lilian?
what about:
"As a child I was afraid on the streets after dark"
is that ok?

Looks much better to me Kfeto. Do it please

done

"Korkardım", "I used to be afraid" olması lazım. Ve bence kalanlık kelimesinin üçü de "dark" ya da "darkness" olarak çevirilse daha güzel olacak.