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| | 13 Septemba 2012 23:49 |
| | "e l'amore è troppo amaro, come il fiele" (??)
"e l'amore --maledetto/dannato sia-- è tanto amaro! (??)
Just guessing... |
| | 14 Septemba 2012 00:48 |
| | I like Lev's latter suggestion!
"e l'amore - maledetto! - è tanto amaro"
Aneta, about the last line, I'd translate it as "c'è abbastanza dolore in un solo addio".
I'd also like to get brusurf's feedback! What do you think about our decisions, @brusurf? |
| | 14 Septemba 2012 01:49 |
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| | 14 Septemba 2012 08:21 |
| | "c'è abbastanza dolore in un solo addio".
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Dear Francky, I know poems are difficult to transalate, because we should feel/understand an author's feelings and read between lines first... Here I'm the author, so it's easier, because I can explain what I meant. But I'm not sure if I can do it precisely.
Ok, I'll try once again...
in this particular case = with this man, in this situation when even "words are like thorns".
But it is still about love considered in general, "love" is sitil a general term here. That's just how the "person speaking" (author) felt love in that time...She just considered it bitter, even if it could be different in other situations.
Et l'amour - maudit soit-il - est si amer" looks good to me, though my French is not enough to say this for sure. But I trust our experts!
Thank you for your work, Francky, Alex and Lev. |
| | 14 Septemba 2012 11:06 |
| | One more thing, Alex.
I can see that brusurf forgot to translate the title which was included in the text.
CzekajÄ…c na spotkanie:
" Aspettando un appuntamento"?
("czekajÄ…c" grammatically is ppa = participium praesentis activvi ) |
| | 14 Septemba 2012 15:25 |
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| | 14 Septemba 2012 16:59 |
| | Grazie Alex! Yes, that is what I thought. |
| | 25 Septemba 2012 11:26 |
| | sorry about my delay :-(
I agree the change considering that I really did not know how to translate that part.
Thanks
I'm going to modify it.
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| | 25 Septemba 2012 12:36 |
| | Thanks brusuf!
Alex, I think you can validate this translation.
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| | 2 Oktoba 2012 20:32 |
| | Hi brusurf,
You have not translated the title/first verse yet (CzekajÄ…c na spotkanie/Waiting for a rendezvous)...
I was suggesting: "Aspettando un appuntamento" and Alex agreed. How about you? |
| | 2 Oktoba 2012 22:13 |
| | Sorry, it's my fault! I'll correct all and accept the translation |
| | 2 Oktoba 2012 22:35 |
| | Alex, but you haven't added the first verse (title) to the translation. The first verse wasn't translated at all - that's why I once gave you the hint. |
| | 3 Oktoba 2012 10:33 |
| | @ Aneta B.
I can visualise the title I've already translated. Can you? :-)
BR
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| | 3 Oktoba 2012 10:56 |
| | Yes we can, thanks brusuf! |
| | 3 Oktoba 2012 12:40 |
| | I'm sorry I don't understand you, brusurf.
I mean your translation is lacking one line - the first line. Compare it with Polish, English and French version.
You should have started not from: "E piuttosto mi piace aspettare", but from "Aspettando un appuntamento". See what I mean? |
| | 3 Oktoba 2012 12:44 |
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| | 3 Oktoba 2012 13:08 |
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| | 4 Oktoba 2012 12:41 |
| | I'm so sorry I was missing the point!
I've got it now!
Thank you all!
Bye |
| | 4 Oktoba 2012 12:44 |
| | You're welcome brusuf!
Thanks to you for your translation work! |
| | 4 Oktoba 2012 19:53 |
| | No problem, brusurf!
Mistakes happen, we all make them from time to time, but thanks to the cooperative work of Cucumers we finally are able to get the best translation which satisfises us. I'm sorry for my "clinging to details".
I'm also very grateful for your work on my text. Thank you.
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