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Traducerea - Esperanto-Engleză - mi sentis sekuron, la sono de la viro sur la rook...Status actual Traducerea
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Categorie Ficţiune/poveste | mi sentis sekuron, la sono de la viro sur la rook... | | Limba sursă: Esperanto
mi sentis sekuron, la sono de la viro sur la rook Altiris nian atenton, li skuis sian manon, li saltis, kaj post sekundo surÅprucigis nin malvarma akvo, la rida sono estis ripetata multfoje en mia orelo, tiu virino ridete diris: Iru al la avo, ni devas savi lin; | Observaţii despre traducere | |
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| I felt safe, the sound of the man on the rock... | | Limba ţintă: Engleză
I felt safe, the sound of the man on the rock caught our attention, he shook his hand, he jumped, and a second later, we were sprinkled with cold water, the laughing sound repeated many times in my ear, that woman said smiling: Go to Grandfather, we must save him; | Observaţii despre traducere | "Shake" as in "tremble", not as in "greeting" "second" as in "time unit", not as in "number two"
Such kind of yuxtaposition is also unnatural in Esperanto. The most likely explanation this message was translated from other non-European language.
Therefore, commas were respected, except in "a second later, cold water", where I added one for clarity.
"Avo" could either mean "grandfather" or "grandmother", but it's usually used for the former. |
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Validat sau editat ultima dată de către Lein - 27 Iulie 2012 12:57
Ultimele mesaje | | | | | 12 Iulie 2012 17:20 | | LeinNumărul mesajelor scrise: 3389 | Hi zciric
I don't think we have many people who speak Esperanto; could you help me evaluate this text please? Thanks! CC: zciric | | | 27 Iulie 2012 12:49 | | zciricNumărul mesajelor scrise: 91 | What I should to check?
If the English translation was the "aim",
it is good, only in two places there is need for changes, I think.
The parts between '=':
"...and a second later, =we were submerged in cold water=, the laughing sound repeated many times in my ear,..."
surÅprucigis nin malvarma akvo -
better is: sprinkled us cold water
And the second thing is:
"...that woman said smiling: =Go with Grandfather=, we must save him;..."
In the Esperanto text the meaning is more for:
"Go TO Grandfather...", not 'WITH'.
If you need any further help... write.
Greetings
Zoran | | | 27 Iulie 2012 12:57 | | LeinNumărul mesajelor scrise: 3389 | Thanks Zoran, that's very helpful |
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