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Traduzione - Albanese-Inglese - Anes lumenjve

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Titolo
Anes lumenjve
Testo
Aggiunto da kfeto
Lingua originale: Albanese

Anes lumenjve

Arratisur, syrgjynosur,
Raskapitur dhe katosur
Po vajtonj pa funt, pa shpresë,
Anës Elbës, anës Spree-së.


Ku e lam' e ku na mbeti
Vaj-vatani e mjer-mileti
Anës detit i palarë,
Anës dritës i paparë,
Pranë sofrës i pangrënë,
Pranë dijes i panxënë,
Lakuriq dhe i dregosur,
Trup e shpirt i sakatosur?

Titolo
by the rivers
Traduzione
Inglese

Tradotto da eleonora13
Lingua di destinazione: Inglese

By the rivers

Fugitive, out in exile,
Exhausted, and threatened,
They mourn endlessly and hopeless
By the Elbes, by the Spreese

Where we left it, and where it stayed
Oh the homeland, and the poor nation
Beside the dirty ocean

Beside the light, unseen
Near the dinner table, uneaten
Close by the clue, that doesn't fit,
Naked and tortured,
Body and soul murdered?
Note sulla traduzione
Elbes and Spreese are names of rivers in Albania so i left it as it is.
Ultima convalida o modifica di lilian canale - 31 Maggio 2008 13:09





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18 Maggio 2008 02:32

lilian canale
Numero di messaggi: 14972
Hi eleonora,

Since this seems to be a poem, I'd try to make it look like one in English too.
Perhaps we could change some structures and words to achieve that.

- What about instead of "without end" using "endlessly"
or instead of "without hope" using "hopeless".? I think this line would be quite shorter and similar to the original.
"They mourn endlessly and hopeless"

- beside the Elbes, beside the Spreese (I'd use "by" instead : By the Elbes, by the Spreese)

- "Where we left it"
What does "it" stand for? Wouldn't it be "him"? Isn't it talking about a person? I didn't understand that part.

- Does the original repeat "poor" in the 7th line?

- "unwashed ocean" ?

- Perhaps we can change "mutilated" into "murdered" so that it makes a better rhyme with "tortured".

What do you think?
Poetry is always difficult, but you did a great job. These are just a few suggestions in order to get a nice rhyme. It's up to you, now.


21 Maggio 2008 02:18

lilian canale
Numero di messaggi: 14972
Hi eleonora13,

Two days later, I'm still waiting...

25 Maggio 2008 22:53

eleonora13
Numero di messaggi: 19
I'm sorry but I'am having some difficulties with my internet connection lately.I really think that your suggestions are great.Would you like to do the editing?

25 Maggio 2008 23:32

lilian canale
Numero di messaggi: 14972
Hi eleonora, no problem.
You can edit it if you agree.

31 Maggio 2008 20:42

kfeto
Numero di messaggi: 953
ok thank you both girls