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Tercüme - İbranice-İngilizce - מותק אני עומד מתחת חלונך

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מותק אני עומד מתחת חלונך
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Öneri chicita
Kaynak dil: İbranice

מותק אני עומד מתחת חלונך
מותק אבל מרגיש כל כך רחוק ממך
מותק תראי מה שקורה לי בגללך
מתי סוף סוף תהיי שלי

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Baby I am standing beneath your window
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İngilizce

Çeviri libera
Hedef dil: İngilizce

Baby, I am standing beneath your window
Baby, but feeling so far away from you
Baby, look what's happening to me because of you
When will you at long last be mine?
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the translation is in keeping with the words and their meaning, and I didn't attempt to make it rhyme like the original. Let me know if you require that.
En son lilian canale tarafından onaylandı - 19 Temmuz 2008 18:58





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15 Temmuz 2008 15:55

lilian canale
Mesaj Sayısı: 14972
Hi libera,

Poetry is always tough.

I would suggest to shorten this line:
"look what's happening to me because of you " to:
"look what you cause me"
and I'd use "finally" instead of "at long last".

What do you think?

15 Temmuz 2008 21:57

libera
Mesaj Sayısı: 257
I wasn't trying for poetry. if my memory serves me correctly, this was for 'meaning only' - and I've asked the requester whether she would like it to be poetic. if she does, I'll have a load of fun making it rhyme and have a meter. as it is, I don't really mind one way or another. at this stage, I just kept it as close to the original as possible, as is my policy to do unless requested otherwise.

15 Temmuz 2008 22:14

lilian canale
Mesaj Sayısı: 14972
Well, firstly this request is not "meaning only".
Secondly, I was not demanding any poetic measure or rhyme from you. If the requestor wanted any of those s/he would have requested "high quality".
What I tried to do by suggesting those changes was making the piece more natural in English.
I don't think my suggestions changed the original meaning in any way. Am I wrong?

Besides, I didn't say the structure you proposed was wrong.

15 Temmuz 2008 22:22

libera
Mesaj Sayısı: 257
your suggestions most certainly didn't change the original meaning. although "look what you cause me" is debatable in my view, the translation I gave for that line is definitely not what I'd call good English. as I mentioned in my previous message, I don't mind one way or the other. I had actually been divided between "finally" and "at long last", and at the end ruled in favor of the latter because it did kind of sound more 'poetic' to me.

15 Temmuz 2008 22:30

lilian canale
Mesaj Sayısı: 14972
OK, let's set a poll and check its accuracy.