Umseting - Enskt-Finskt - Each small candle

Yes, this should be discussed as it is a difficult one to interpret.

I like the second line. First some thoughts for you to consider. Maybe I would go as far as to use "kiduttaja" and "kiväärit".
"Mutta sokea tarkoituksettomuus
Turtuneen armottoman maailman"
This certainly one way to put it although I personally would very much like to use "välinpitämättömyys" instead of tarkoituksettomuus and "tunteeton" instead of turtunut. Question of style I think.

Then two spots where there is a real problem:

"Ei maan päälle langennut yö
Viimeinen vaipunut tuskan sydän on syöksynyt"
Could you think of changing this a bit? Maybe with "tuskan tähti sammunut"...

"musta aukko" ? How do you feel about this, any other suggestions?

Please write something when voting, I feel we should cooperate here, thank you.

Mielipiteitä puoleen ja toiseen, mutta ei ehdotuksia valitettavasti. Ehkä haluat vielä muokata, elpasa?

Tuskan sydän should be tuskan tähti

Sorry this has taken so long, but it was very difficult to decide should I edit only a word or two or more... You'll get good ranking points for the language. The editing is mainly opinion-based but I feel that the writer wants to express his point very strongly and I chose to edit a bit more.