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Traduction - Anglais-Latin - Brother, not a Lover

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Catégorie Poésie - Amour / Amitié

Titre
Brother, not a Lover
Texte
Proposé par redz21
Langue de départ: Anglais

You're really a beautiful soul
my Brother, my Hell, my Beloved...
How to tell you that I'm sorry, really sorry,
Blame me, Hate me, but don't give the word 'love' on me...
I'm not that worth.
Commentaires pour la traduction
I want to give this 'note' to a person who's like a brother for me.

Titre
Frater, non Amator
Traduction
Latin

Traduit par Aneta B.
Langue d'arrivée: Latin

Anima vere pulchra tu es
Frater meus, Tartarus meus, Amatus...
Quomodo tibi dicam me paenitere, vero paenitere,
Me reprehendeas, odio me habeas, sed me amorem noli vocare...
Usque adeo digna non sum.
Commentaires pour la traduction
Amatus/Dilectus
Dernière édition ou validation par Aneta B. - 6 Septembre 2011 17:31





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30 Août 2011 09:38

Francky5591
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Female gender with "dignus" ("digna", maybe (cf the remark left by the requester )

30 Août 2011 11:12

Francky5591
Nombre de messages: 12396
Already posted above (As I was asked by the server to develop my argumentation after having clicked on "the translation is right but might be improved"

30 Août 2011 11:56

Aneta B.
Nombre de messages: 4487
You are right, Francky! Thank you! I forgot the requester was female...

31 Août 2011 10:59

Francky5591
Nombre de messages: 12396
Hi dear!

Now that you did the edit, my vote at the poll is "green", and not "blue" anymore!

Are you waiting for Efy's vote before validating?




31 Août 2011 12:11

emaltotinn
Nombre de messages: 1
I think that "anima" is better than "animus"; "animus" is more like "spirit". Moreover, "my Brother etc." require the vocative: "mi frater, Tartare, dilecte" (and "dilectus" provides the text a nice "variatio" in reference to the verb "amare"

31 Août 2011 15:10

Aneta B.
Nombre de messages: 4487
Dear Francky,
Yes, I'm waiting for Efee's opinion as usual when it concerns longer and more complicated texts.

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Dear Efee,
Could you help me with an evaluation here? It's really difficult to deal with my own translations without your help...

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Dear amaltoninn,
Thank you for your input.
Yes I agree that 'anima' would fit even better than 'animus' in this context.

But, it's not so obvious that the words in a second line are in the Vocative. They can be also in the Nonimative, don't you think?
I have connected them with the first line where we have "tu es" (you are).
tu es --> anima pulchra
tu es-->frater meus
tu es--> Tartarus meus
tu es--> amatus/dilectus meus

Of course your interpretation is also possible.
That's why I will ask the requester to clarify a meaning of the line.

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Dear edz21,
Could you please tell us whether the words in a second line are in the Nominative and represent or describe the subject or they are in the Vocative case (=case of address), i.e. they "call" the subject.
Thank you.

My best regards

Aneta B.


31 Août 2011 15:06

Aneta B.
Nombre de messages: 4487
Ooops! Serena?

CC: Efylove

2 Septembre 2011 07:57

Efylove
Nombre de messages: 1015
Hi Aneta!
Sorry for the delay, I'm being very busy, but I'll tell you everything later.

Green light for your translation! Just a doubt abut "odio me habeas": why did you choose the subjunctive and not an imperative (as you did for "reprehende"?

However, as amaltoninn suggested, I will wait for edz21's answer about the second line, because it seems quite ambiguous (I also though they were vocative!).



2 Septembre 2011 09:33

Aneta B.
Nombre de messages: 4487
Ha! Yes, first I had imperatives in both the verbs then I decided to change into subjunctive, but I have done it only with the one... Have no idea why... Thank you!

All right. Let's wait for the requester's explanations.

2 Septembre 2011 23:41

Aneta B.
Nombre de messages: 4487
redz21?
You logged in tonight, but didn't answer our question...

6 Septembre 2011 17:29

Aneta B.
Nombre de messages: 4487
Since the requester has not replied (I understand he doesn't care anymore), I'm gonna accept the translation as it is. I'll make only the few changes that we agreed to.
Thanks to all of you for your help!