Översättning - Engelska-Spanska - Each small candle

hej älskling hur mår du? vad gör du varför har du inte på din mobil för hur ska jag kunna få tag på dig? var är du nu snälla kan du komma in på msn igen....? jag saknar dig jätte mycket jag vill ha dig här hos mig nu:s puss o kram

Sorry can you translate your message in english ?

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The published translation of this song into Spanish (4 years ago, as I notice!) has several mistakes; a couple of them really serious -unacceptable in my opinion-. Moreover this is a favourite text.
So, I propose here a corrected version:

Ni el torturador me asustará
Ni la caída final del cuerpo
Ni los cañones de los rifles de la muerte
Ni las sombras en el muro
Ni la noche, cuando al suelo
Sea arrojada la última leve estrella de dolor
Sino la ciega indiferencia
De un mundo cruel y sin piedad

Y cada pequeña vela
Ilumina un rincón de la oscuridad...

Thanks Lev van Pelt, I'll forward your remark to a Spanish native speaker

Hi Lilian, what should we do here, should we switch with Lev's version

Thanks!

CC: lilian canale

Hi again, Francky5591!

Thanks for your response on this subject as well.
I just want to remark than I am in fact(from my very birth, or not much afterwards :-) a native Spanish speaker, being born near Barcelona, from Spanish parents...

And I want to clarify that I am ALSO a native Catalan speaker (we are usually bilingual in my little Country with no state :-/

Thanks indeed for your kind attention,

Lev

Yes, I could see on your profile that you were Spanish, what I meant but forgot to mention was "a Spanish native speaker with a monkey-wrench" (an admin here has got a monkey-wrench under her/his avatar)

You're welcome Lev! Cheer up Catalunya!

Of course!
I understood this just a few seconds after having posted my messages.
Anyway, going back to the published translation of this lyrics by Roger Waters, I must recommend with strength its revision; or even removal, given the flagrant errors that it contains.
(I've seen that the translator is from Spain, and I have no doubts that she knows Spanish; but neither have I any doubt that she did not read well the original.)

I've arrived a little bit late with my last answer, Francky. You have anticipated with your welcome, and your "Cheer up Catalunya (well written with "ny"!!)
I feel very grateful and impressed by this. I can assure you.
Many many thanks.

(And "Vive La France !" :-))

I believe you're right lev, no doubt on it!
That will certainly be confirmed by Lilian, and we'll switch with the version you gave.

Our messages cross all the time!

I wish you a good night, Lev, I'll log out now.

Cheers!

Hi guys,

Yes, in fact Lev van Pelt is right about this translation. I was not part of the team at that time and I honestly can't understand why this version was accepted.
I'll reject it and give Lev van Pelt the chance of doing a better job

Thanks both for your vigilance.