Vertimas - Turkų-Anglų - 1001 nopti

Hi kfeto,

just a few points:
"Kerem's wish to work on the same project together with Åžehrazat, angers Onur and saddens Bennu."

I think that should read:
"Kerem wishes to work on the same project together with Åžehrazat, what angers Onur and saddens Bennu."
and

"Burhan who refused his grandchild to kiss his hand, becomes bedridden with grief"

"Burhan who refused to let his grandchild kiss his hand is bedridden in grief..."

What do you think? Does it convey the original?

i changed the "to let" it's much better now. thank you

the other's i'd rather keep.