[Mount Atlas] is entirely silent during the day and, isolated, it arouses horror; [at night] it is enlightened by nocturnal fires and it echoes everywhere with the choirs of Aegipans; you can hear the singing of flutes and the tinkle of cymbals along the seashore.
הערות לגבי התרגום
Cap. XXIV, Caius Julius Solinus, "De Mirabilibus Mundi". He's talking about Mount Atlas.
Literally: "it isn't isolated without horror"; "the singing of flutes and the tinkle of cymbals are heard". "Per oram maritimam" = you can hear the singing of these instruments even along the seashore.
[Berg Atlas] ist tagsüber vollkommen ruhig und isoliert, er ruft Horror hervor; [nachts] leuchtet er von nächtlichen Feuern und es gibt überall Echos mit den Chören der Aegipanen; Du kannst das Flötenspiel hören und das Klingeln der Zimbeln entlang der Meeresküste.
הערות לגבי התרגום
edited the sentence to "...leuchtet er von nächtlichen Feuern..." 10.01.10 19:40 R.
אושר לאחרונה ע"י Francky5591 - 10 ינואר 2010 22:50
I think it is fine as it is now. It is a perfect translation of the English text.
Jollyo's suggestion about adding a comma before 'isoliert' makes your translation follow more closely the Latin source text [Silet per diem universus, nec sine horrore secretus est], which also puts 'isoliert' in the same phrase as 'Horror', separating it from 'ruhig'.However, if you add that comma before 'isoliert', the word order of 'er ruft' must be inversed.
Mark that I have suggested [8 Jan. 11.41] to ommit 'nächtlichen', for a similar reason. The Latin text [lucet nocturnis ignibus] mentions 'nächtlich/nocturnis' just once. Therefore, if you take Latin instead of English as your source text, it would be more appropiate to say 'er leuchtet mit nächtlichen Feuern' or 'nachts ist er von Feuern erhellt'. It all depends on what you consider to be your source text.
תרגומים מועדפים
תרגום - אנגלית-גרמנית - Mount Atlas
- 10 ינואר 2010 22:50
