Lee_bell3, hello! I want to say that I didn't reject your translation, as I'm not the English expert.
Maybe kafetzou rejected because of a couple of details, like :
-"EREV" translated as "night" ("night" is "LAILA", isn't it?)
-"*****" ? "stars"? (QYRIA YEFEFIYA)
I just don't know, as my skills in Hebrew are very limited...
I cannot edit this translation, because I cannot read Hebrew, and it's now locked to anyone except an expert for English (like me) or an administrator.
I made some changes. Since these are song titles, I wrote them in title format, so that they would be recognizable as such. I also changed a few words.