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"Als das Sonnenlicht er stahl" would be "When he (it) stole the sunlight"

Instead of "sky" (4th line) I'd say "canopy" - it's more poetic.

"The moonlight" for "Des Mondes Schein" is of course correct as regards content, but I'd say "The glow/shine of the moon" (even more precise).

Same with the last sentence, "And still, the people's/men's hope triumphs" (because it is genitive in German).


Sorry if I'm a bit meticulous

You're not meticulous at all (well, maybe a bit, but it's for the best ) Thanks for the advice!

German poetry just isn't my thing

You're welcome, it's just that we've holidays right now, which means I've got a lot of time to be meticulous :P Normally, my perfectionism is held under control by the lack of time...