Dịch - Italian-English - Desidero il tuo bacioCurrent status Dịch
Nhóm chuyên mục Poetry - Love / Friendship  This translation request is "Meaning only". | | | Source language: Italian
Desidero il tuo bacio
come la ruota del mulino
attende l'acqua. | Remarks about the translation | Haiku in italiano.
Tema: amore.
Caratteristiche: 3 versi, una similitudine.
Tradurre in inglese (Inghilterra). |
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I desire your kiss
just like the wheel of a mill
waits for the water |
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Bài gửi sau cùng | | | | |
13 Tháng 5 2011 14:37 | | | Hi Alex,
I see that the Italian version didn't take into account the traditional (or most usual) structure of a haiku that is 3 lines containing 5 syllables in the first and third lines and 7 syllables in the second. Since that is possible to abtain in English without changing the meaning of the original in Italian, I'd suggest:
I desire your kiss
just like the wheel of a mill
waits for the water
What do you think?  | | |
13 Tháng 5 2011 16:09 | | | Well, that's great! Thank you   |
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