Translation - Turkish-English - bir geceligine

Hi Mesud2991

Are you sure about the last sentence? Should it not be either of the following?

Could I carry you inside me

or

Could you put you (or: yourself) inside me

That just seems to make more sense. However, I don't speak Turkish, so please let me know what you think!

What is wrong with the last sentence? Because your suggestions are wrong compared to the original.

OK, thanks, in that case I will leave this as it is It just sounds a bit illogical, but that may be the same in the original
I will set a poll.

Then, let me explain:

The person's love is so big that s/he wonders if his/her beloved can carry it. The person's love was expressed as 'you inside me".

I see! I have put the explanation under the translation. Thank you!

"O darling" should be used instead of "hey darling".
And "acaba" was not translated into English, we can say "I wonder" for this word.

And I am not sure about the correctness of last part, "bendeki sen". It's hard to translate.

"I wonder, could you carry ‘yourself’ which is inside me."

I don't know if it is correct or not, maybe you can correct it Lein

That sounds good! I'll wait for Mesud's reaction before editing anything.

I also agree w. yourself.

No need to say 'I wonder'. While translating, you shouldn't translate word for word. For instance,

What should we do? (In Turkish, 'ne yapsak acaba?')
Do the English say 'I wonder if what we should do'?

CC: Arnavut Biberi

If it's better than mine, let's edit it.

Umm.. But it is better when we read the whole text, yes there is no need to translate "acaba" every time. If we put "I wonder", the purpose of exchanging will be expressed clearly according to text. But it is up to you.

Hi both

I think we do not really need 'I wonder', because the sentence makes it clear that the person is wondering etc.
I have edited in a slightly different way and accepted the translation - please let me know if you don't agree

It's good, Lein