This is not bad, fuyaka, but you need to make the following corrections:
1) You should never have spaces before commas, but always afterwards.
2) Maybe "if you loved" should be "if you ever loved".
3) "you would have came" should be "you would come".
4) "i" should be capitalized (always).
I like your translation of the awkward phrase "ülkü genci", by the way.