In this work will be presented, as a case study, the use of BPM to optimize the processes of accounts receivable, the ERPs used by the company "SR Brinquedos" through BizAgiExpress, a tool for mapping processes, comparing the old company's ERP INFORMAX software to the new ERP system called FIRST, developed by TOTVS, showing the advantages of its use with the processes.
Validated by Francky5591 - 27 lapkritis 2010 10:56
Also, 'it' in the first sentence should be deleted ('in this work, it will be presented the use of...' )
To make it sound more natural, I would say 'compare' instead of 'make a comparison' and possibly cut the sentence in two before 'making a comparison' (or 'comparing') as English has less of a tendency to form very long sentences than Portuguese - but this is just style, not meaning