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Dịch - Dutch-English - Het begin van een nieuw leven, ontroerend mooi...Current status Dịch
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Nhóm chuyên mục Poetry - Home / Family | Het begin van een nieuw leven, ontroerend mooi... | | Source language: Dutch
Het begin van een nieuw leven, ontroerend mooi en klein. Het is eigenlijk niet te beschrijven, hoe blij en gelukkig we met ons kindje zijn. | Remarks about the translation | |
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| The beginning of a new life, ... | | Target language: English
The beginning of a new life, movingly beautiful and tiny. It really can't be described, how happy and fortunate we feel with our baby. |
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Bài gửi sau cùng | | | | | 16 Tháng 1 2009 11:02 | |  LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | 'ontroerend mooi en klein': 'ontroerend' (moving - I like your translation!) is an adverb, not an adjective here. Also, 'nice' is somewhat weak to translate 'mooi' here. I would say 'beautiful'.
My suggestion would be something like 'movingly beautiful and tiny'.
However, this doesn't sound as nice, by far, as the original (too bulky) so maybe a less literal alternative is needed to capture the -almost- poetry.
For the last line, I would replace 'we are' with 'we feel'. | | | 16 Tháng 1 2009 11:44 | | | Hey Lein,
What do you think about "affectingly"?
I could only remember of that word.
But I like your suggestion better... | | | 16 Tháng 1 2009 13:58 | |  LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | Hi Marija,
I definitely like your 'movingly' better...
My comment wasa a bit confusing, I meant that your original tranlation sounds much nicer than my suggestion but doesn't quite capture the literal meaning of the Dutch text.
I think 'movingly beautiful and tiny' does capture the literal meaning - but then the 'fragility' of the Dutch sentence is lost... I think you may have to choose between a literal translation and one that captures the fragile, special, miracle-like feeling of what the text is trying to convey... | | | 16 Tháng 1 2009 14:45 | | | I have chosen.  | | | 16 Tháng 1 2009 15:23 | | | Well girls, what about "touching" or "poignant"?
Those would sound more poetic. | | | 16 Tháng 1 2009 15:53 | |  LeinTổng số bài gửi: 3389 | I would prefer 'movingly' or 'touchingly' but would leave the choice to Maki_sindja
I'm happy as it is now  |
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