Hello ellasevia, you made a good translation but it has small mistakes of writing.
At first, as the so-called "Teniwoha", Japanese particles: "Wa" is not "ã‚â€but "ã¯".
And if it sounds like "yooda" in dairy conversation, it must be written as "よã†ã " when you write.
And...maybe you haven't learned to write in "Kanji".
I would like to show you a example text mixed with Kanji, for just sample.
"æ„›ã¯é¢¨ã®ã‚ˆã†ã 。見るã“ã¨ã¯ã§ããªã„。ã—ã‹ã—æ„Ÿã˜ã‚‹ã“ã¨ã¯ã§ãる。"